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Part 4 of the Transformers fanfic

Part 1 Part 2 Part 3

And for those wondering... Colossus is not Clench. I didn't know that name for him existed when I wrote this and I don't feel like giving the name up.

Nova Black leaned against the wall, putting one hand to her head. She'd been trailing Brightbolt for days now, and gotten nothing out of it but a splitting processor ache. Despite his pro-Autobot sympathies, she hadn't seen him do so much as test out an old comm link.

Her other attempts to find out more about the Autobots who'd left the graffiti had gone just as badly. Apparently they'd seen what she'd done to their little stash, and gotten the message. That was probably a good thing, but it made finding more information difficult.

So she'd left for one of her favorite hiding places, hoping to relax and think. If thinking was even possible with her head pounding like this.

"Eclipse," said a voice.

Startled, Nova turned. "Who is it?" she hissed.

A large vehicle lumbered over to her. She knew who it was, of course. Still, for a moment, the newcomer reminded her so intensely of Colossus that she stepped back, startled.

"Easy there, Eclipse. I'm not here to get in your way," the newcomer said, transforming into a lumbering, squat black robot. "I came to find you because I heard you talking at the meeting. I wanted to tell you I think you're right."

Nova smiled. "I'm glad to hear that someone does. Especially after Brightbolt's utterly lovely comments about me." She scowled.

The other bot chuckled. "Heh. I'm not sure what Shiny thought that speech would do for him. Where does he think we are? The frontlines of the war?" He shook his dark head. "I have to admit I'm curious about you now, though. I'd love to know if what he said about you means anything."

Nova clenched her fists. "It means Brightbolt's gotten his polish in his processor." Her mouth parts squeaked slightly as they shifted into a sneer. "If I had as much sympathy for the Decepticons as he thinks I do, this place would be a crater."

"Sometimes I'm surprised it's not," the other rumbled, looking at the hastily constructed buildings, then down at the cracked ground. "If they ever come here for more than taxes --"

"If they ever do that, we're all dead." Nova didn't doubt she could fight off at least one of them. She'd done it enough times before. But if they came in numbers, she'd tried that once as well, and failed. And back then, she'd been at her best. Stellar cycles here, with little fuel, bad repairs, and no practice had surely taken their toll.

"We're all dead if we defy them, you mean." He turned to face her, his round optics staring. "If we don't, maybe we're not."

"If we don't? If they come here looking for their enemies, they won't just leave us alone." Her wings fluttered. "We're lucky they haven't already decided the settlement makes good target practice."

"If we're in their way, yeah." The other frowned, his curling lip making the metal of his face look cracked. "But we don't have to be. Let's just say that if the war makes it over here, I'm not interested in being on the losing side."

Nova shook her head in surprise. "You would betray the settlement?"

The bigger bot's chest parts vibrated with the laughter. "I don't like the Autobots any more than you do, Eclipse. There's only one other side. You telling me you're not on it?"

Nova growled. This was the last thing she needed. "I already told you, I'm not a Decepticon."

"So what does that mean? The Decepticons and the Autobots show up and have a giant battle in our front yard, you help the 'Cons kick the slag out of the rebels, and then you go right back to life as usual out here?" He snorted, puffs of hot air emerging from the vents on the sides of his head.

Nova clenched her dental plates. "No. I make sure it doesn't come to that. I drive them off, or I go after them. I make sure the Decepticons never notice."

"And if they do?" the other pressed.

"I leave," she spat, snarling the words. "I -- hide."

"You, hide?" He snorted again. "All of Settlement Four knows you're looking for a fight." He chuckled. "Built for one, too, apparently. There's no way in hell you'd fly away from the chance to --" He stopped.

"You already got into trouble with them, didn't you?"

Nova sighed, trying to think of some way to deny it. Slaggit, we're supposed to be clever! But the pain in her head made it difficult to think. If he'd reasoned out this much, no lie she came up with now would convince him he was wrong.

"Maybe."

"So what did you do?" he asked, his round optics widening. "I can't imagine anything that would bother those bots."

"Nothing." Nova's dental plates clenched. "It was a brawl that got out of hand. That was all."

The other cocked his head, his neck mechanisms creaking as he moved. "Then you must have been brawling with someone important. I've never known Decepticons to care how rough a brawl gets. Unless it's to hope it gets worse."

"True enough." It really was too quiet around here. She chuckled, looking at the bigger bot and once again thinking of Colossus. She'd always enjoyed sparring with that lumbering behemoth.

Mainly because she always won. There was something to be said for speed and maneuverability.

"So what happened?" the other grunted. "You gonna tell me, or sit there thinking until we both rust?"

"Why should I tell you?" Nova's wings fluttered in irritation. This conversation was far less fun than those memories. And could easily become a problem.

"Because I already know something did. What do the details matter? If I wanted to tell 'em you're out here, I already could."

Then maybe I should just blast the slag out of you, Nova thought. Then again, it was a bad idea. She'd never be able to stay after killing someone, and Brightbolt had already made half the Settlement suspicious anyway. If she killed him, that half would decide she must be a 'Con for doing it. And it wasn't much of a step from there to the truth about her. At least if it was just this bot, she might have some control over who knew what.

Besides, she'd never have another chance to tell anyone what those bastards had tried to do and why. Grandeur knew something had happened, but the less that bot knew about what it was, the better. He only protected her because his ex-'Con buddy had died protecting him. If he knew what had really happened, he'd know she'd meant it when she said she was nothing like his little hero.

"All right then. I knew better than to pick a fight with Bane, so I picked one with his pet conehead instead. No one liked him much, and it's not like he did anything but hover around Bane sucking up anyway. But it sent a message when he crashed to the ground, and I stood over him and --" One hand twitched with the memory, but she said nothing.

"You killed him, didn't you?"

Nova studied the big bot's face. She didn't see fear in the flat, dented face regarding her. Besides, if he meant what he said about siding with the Decepticons, he'd long since made his peace with the world he lived in and the other bots in it.

"I didn't intend to slag him. I just meant to knock him around. But I never liked Bane, and I liked Cinder even less." Her lips curled into a snarl. "Slagging little suckup. Someone should have got him long before I did."

She growled. "I didn't think it would matter. Primus knows it wasn't the first time Decepticons argued and someone ended up dead."

"But Bane liked him, apparently. Is he the one that went after you?"

"That lazy fool would never bother. But a few of the 'Cons in the bar were uneasy about it." Then there was the one who liked the idea of me getting in trouble, she thought, her lip curling in renewed rage. "And if you know Decepticons, you know that 'Cons who get themselves into trouble get themselves out of it."

She looked down, remembering. She'd looked right at Colossus. The big bot had stared back, holding her gaze for a long moment, and then looked away.

She'd known what that was about. Anyone who needed help was weak; anyone who was weak deserved his fate.

One by one, they'd joined the gathering mob, their optics brightening at the thought of more violence, or turned away as Colossus had.

"Wait, a whole mob of 'em came after you and you actually got away?" He whistled, a grating, metallic sound. "You're either very smart, Eclipse -- or very, very lucky."

"Lucky, probably," she answered, wincing in remembered pain. She'd damaged the hell out of one of her wings squeezing through a narrow gap, betting her pursuers wouldn't follow. They hadn't, but it had certainly hurt like hell. And getting shot by her buddies' lasers hadn't felt too good either. "I only survived thanks to the signal dampener currently installed in Tower Three."
"That was yours?"

"Once I stole it, yes." She smirked. "They blew up the building where I'd found it, thinking I was still inside. I activated the dampener as it exploded. When my signal vanished --"

The other nodded, his great head creaking. "They figured you died in the blast." His face wrinkled into another smile. "That's not lucky, Eclipse. That's clever."

"Thank you." She nodded, then gritted her dental plates. "But if you want to make friends with Decepticons, I won't be helping you. I'm only alive right now because the oth -- because the Decepticons think I'm already dead."

"Understood. But now you've got valuable information about a possible rebellion."

Nova tilted her head. "And? What is it you expect me to do, go --"

She stopped, her mouth falling open with a faint metallic squeak. "-- crawling back?"

He regarded her without speaking, the only sound the faint rasp of air emerging from the vents on the sides of his head.

She, too, was silent for long moments. Slowly, her lip curled into a snarl. "Get out of here," she snapped, yellow optics flashing. "Just go. Now."

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aeon_entwined
Sep. 29th, 2009 04:53 am (UTC)
*OMNOMNOM*

This thing is good enough to eat. Srsly. *glomps you* Can't wait for the next one. :D
fierceawakening
Sep. 29th, 2009 11:20 am (UTC)
XD XD I'm so glad. I totally HATED it when I was writing it at first. I really was impatient to tell her story* but I was worried that she didn't have enough provocation and it would just be OMP HERE HAVE AN UTTERLY NONSENSICAL INFODUMP THAT IS COMPLETELY UNWISE.

Then I managed to actually make it work. And I was happy. Yes.


*especially because it involves a conehead dying horribly. Those things look ridiculous. Decepticons should have style, slaggit. ;-)

Edited at 2009-09-29 11:26 am (UTC)
fierceawakening
Sep. 29th, 2009 11:29 am (UTC)
ALSO WHEN I GET FREE TIME I SO NEED TO MAKE ANOTHER ICON OF HER WHERE SHE'S ACTUALLY SCOWLING CONSIDERING THAT'S HER NATURAL STATE
sentso
Sep. 29th, 2009 03:58 pm (UTC)
Funny enough just the other day while in the shower I was thinking "Has Trin done more on Nova?" I didn't want to say anything because I can't explain why I was thinking of Trin and Nova while in the shower.
fierceawakening
Oct. 1st, 2009 01:46 am (UTC)
*Nova peers in horror at the showering squishy*

So that's why those disgusting little things cover themselves in cloth.

*shudder* Maybe I should have just gotten rid of my old optics and not installed these new ones. It would have spared me seeing that. *wing twitch*

Edited at 2009-10-01 01:50 am (UTC)
sentso
Oct. 1st, 2009 01:45 pm (UTC)
HA.

Actually made me snicker at work.
ultharkitty
Sep. 30th, 2009 01:15 pm (UTC)
Very cool.

Nova continues to be interesting, and wonderfully (and understandably) grouchy. The memories of Collossus add a good hint of nostalgia - albeit a nostalgia that most of the other neutrals might not understand - to her reminiscences.

I love the way she got away from the 'Cons - it's so nice to see that move told in this way, not for laughs, but as part of something quite bitter.

Also, Coneheads, OMG yes they need to be kicked about a bit :P I like that she killed Bane's lackey, but she would much rather have killed Bane. It makes it somehow quite sad, in a cool way.
fierceawakening
Oct. 1st, 2009 01:28 am (UTC)
Nova continues to be interesting, and wonderfully (and understandably) grouchy.

She definitely is. I think her normal mood range is something like "bad mood - worse mood." I'd offer her a hug, but I'm squishy and I'd probably wind up impressively decapitated if I tried.

I love the way she got away from the 'Cons - it's so nice to see that move told in this way, not for laughs, but as part of something quite bitter.

For laughs? I'm not sure what it would even be if I told it for laughs. I love the Decepticons. It's no sin to write some of them as laughingstocks, but I hate the whole thing where they get played as comical thugs and nothing more. I think it's much more interesting to think of/write Decepticon culture and Autobot culture as different ways of life based on opposing value systems, and allow each to have merits and drawbacks. That makes writing about everyone more fun and interesting for me -- not only Decepticons (and characters with Decepticon-aligned value systems) and neutrals, but also Autobots (and their allies/sympathizers.)

I'm trying to make everyone interesting and understandable and worth empathizing with in this story, whether that's Nova Black or Brightbolt. I think it's a richer story if all the characters have motivations that make them worth liking.

(Which is the one criticism I have of Megatron: Origin actually. As much as I love it to pieces and think it is great, I was kind of disappointed that the Autobots acted... so little like themselves. I don't think it would have taken away from the rise of the Decepticons to have had the 'Bots act a bit more recognizably 'Bot-ish. I don't mean "don't show any corruption in their ranks" -- that's unrealistic and silly and there'd be no reason for Megatron's choices if something wasn't there for him to rebel against -- but I thought they weren't quite, well, them enough.)

Also, Coneheads, OMG yes they need to be kicked about a bit :P

XD

I like that she killed Bane's lackey, but she would much rather have killed Bane. It makes it somehow quite sad, in a cool way.

I thought that was more realistic than the whole Starscream bit. Attacking the leader is really a stupid move unless you are actually carefully planning a coup d'état.


Edited at 2009-10-01 01:38 am (UTC)
ultharkitty
Oct. 1st, 2009 12:24 pm (UTC)
I'd offer her a hug, but I'm squishy and I'd probably wind up impressively decapitated if I tried. lol :P

Re. comedic 'Cons *nods in agreement*.

For laughs? In a fair few things that I've read (TF stuff and non TF stuff), when the protag uses a distraction to make the antags believe he/she/it is dead, it's usually written as comedy. It's really nice to see that kind of move written as part of a far bleaker and more realistic world.

Hmm, I see what you mean about the 'Bots in M:O. That said, I utterly loved Sentinel Prime (who I knew nothing whatsoever about before reading that, except for some cute wingkink with Prowl I read a while back). He reminded me a lot of Judge Dredd.

I thought that was more realistic than the whole Starscream bit. Totally. Much as Starscream's attempts to topple Megs never fail to amuse me, I really can't see Nova going after Bane directly unless there were exceptional circumstances (although I'd love to see her kick the slag out of Bane one day... ;) which I probably said before, but there we go :P).

Edited at 2009-10-01 12:24 pm (UTC)
fierceawakening
Oct. 1st, 2009 10:11 pm (UTC)
For laughs? In a fair few things that I've read (TF stuff and non TF stuff), when the protag uses a distraction to make the antags believe he/she/it is dead, it's usually written as comedy. It's really nice to see that kind of move written as part of a far bleaker and more realistic world.

Ahh, now I see. Well, I'm glad you thought it worked. XD

That said, I utterly loved Sentinel Prime (who I knew nothing whatsoever about before reading that, except for some cute wingkink with Prowl I read a while back). He reminded me a lot of Judge Dredd.

Eh. I didn't like him all that much. Though his "Your ways, criminal? And when you have crossed the planet with your little gang of thugs. What will you do then?" line was pretty cool.

Totally. Much as Starscream's attempts to topple Megs never fail to amuse me, I really can't see Nova going after Bane directly unless there were exceptional circumstances (although I'd love to see her kick the slag out of Bane one day... ;) which I probably said before, but there we go :P).

Yeah... she has a temper, and this isn't the last time it'll get her into serious trouble, believe me... but she's not stupid.
erin_c_1978
Oct. 13th, 2009 02:29 am (UTC)
This thing is so cool I don't even know where to start. At some point I want to come back and give more detailed feedback, but for now, I'll just say that I find Nova Black's saga really engrossing, with a lot of intriguing dimension (Nova's backstory, Grandeur's backstory, Brightbolt's backstory). Good stuff.
fierceawakening
Oct. 18th, 2009 11:14 pm (UTC)
Thank yoU!
roykay
Oct. 16th, 2009 03:31 am (UTC)
Finally catching up (including revised 3) and quite pleased. I hope you continue.

Minor quibble on nomenclature: "Neck" is kink of anthropomorphic (yeah, so is the whole 'bot structure, but...). Consider looking at this from a functionality standpoint. The "head" serves as a compact sensor/processor array, basically maximizing the speed of processing of sensor inputs. I don't know what would be a better approach because "cspa" doesn't readily say anything, but maybe some of this anatomy could have more machine-based names.
fierceawakening
Oct. 18th, 2009 02:31 pm (UTC)
*nods* Yeah, that is a problem, and there are a few common phrases/words the fandom has adopted to handle those problems, like "dental plates" for the analog of "teeth." The thing is, though, that in some fanfic I notice the opposite problem, where just about every anatomical feature has a new name and it starts, IMO, to get distracting. (My pet peeve here is "pedes" for "feet." I don't know why, but it makes me wince.) There might be a good word for an analog of "neck," but I'm not sure what, and if it's too jargony I might just leave it anyway.
roykay
Oct. 18th, 2009 11:08 pm (UTC)
...grimace...

Yeah, I see the problem with going overboard the other way too. To be honest, I have no idea whether "dental plates" serve any purpose other than to make the robots anthropomorphic rather than just functional. To my knowledge they aren't necessary for intake of enercon cubes.


Meanwhile I have stared at these words for 15 min and come up with nothing by way of word or acronym.

HEAD
CAPITOL
CRANIAL
processor sensor array
processor sensor unit
kopf




fierceawakening
Oct. 18th, 2009 11:13 pm (UTC)
To be honest, I have no idea whether "dental plates" serve any purpose other than to make the robots anthropomorphic rather than just functional.

Cool facial expressions!

But yes, the few times TFs are shown ingesting energon, they do so by drinking it, which wouldn't require dental plates anyway. (Yes, I agree, drinking fuel is also strange.)
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fierceawakening
Oct. 18th, 2009 02:24 pm (UTC)
XD I'm really glad you're liking it. And yeah, I agree with a whole lot of your criticisms of canon femmes. The way they're depicted really doesn't make much sense. (Robo-boobies and pinched waists? Since when is a giant robot a mammal?)

And when they finally introduced femmes into G1, none were 'Cons. Why? The closest we got was Nightbird, who was actually pretty awesome IMO, but 1) only a 'Con because Bombshell messed with her processor and 2) not even a Transformer! Urgh.

I don't hate them on principle and I do quite like Slipstream from TF:A, but... I too get tired of the way their femininity is constantly played up, as if their gender 1) is a caricature that 2) makes them special somehow, when the mechs get to be different from one another and interesting.

For me... well, for me the whole idea that TFs have a gender at all is kind of... funny. But if the beloved characters are going to be referred to as "he" rather than some gender neutral pronoun, I decided the hell with it, I can write a "she" who isn't a ridiculous idiot. Or frilly.

Hell, she'd probably take issue with the word "femme" for being too girly... *grin*

Edited at 2009-10-18 02:24 pm (UTC)
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